It is a place we have all been to,
a place that everyone love,
a place that needs time and effort to get to,
but you will forget any negative things you have been through,
a place with no fear,
quick and come here,
this is the place without sadness
and people call it happiness.
Hi Ryan! I really liked this poem! The last half of the poem had some interesting personification.(I think that's personification) and it was a really happy, joyful poem! However I do question why you put the thing that we were supposed to guess in here on the last line. In the second line, is "love" correct? Overall a very good and well-written poem!
ReplyDeleteHello Ryan! This is great, it looked like you put alot of effort into getting the rhymes to match! Also good job on personification on the third line, and different lengths of each line (makes it look cool)! A mistake would be the concept of letting us guess... didn't you give away the answer on the last line "people call it happiness"? Anyways, nicely done I really liked it!
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